Wakka tries to cheer Lulu up. Set mid-game, shortly before Gagazet. Drabble originally written for a challenge on LJ.
- Have you noticed that the archive has messed up your formatting and duplicated your text? It's done that to me a few times as well.
Your dialogue for Lulu is good as usual, if a little harsher than I would see her being for an offhand comment at that point of the journey. She seems to me to mellow throughout the game. That's just an opinion though. I still like your Lulu's temper and the way she punctuates her speech with Fira.
I'll just say again that I really enjoy the way you flesh out Wakka and Lulu and their relationship in a believable and enjoyable way.
- pokes formatting as well
I'm prowling my way back through your stories, since I'm a Lu fan. Lulu is an interestingly complex figure. She can be rather snappish at times. At other times, she's the one urging Wakka to mellow, when he's fussing about Yevon. (I remember her telling him to listen to the Hymn after they fall through the ice in Macalania.) Also, she's so private, it's very rare for her to explain when she's angry, upset, or frustrated -- at least in the game, she tends to blow people off with an "I need to be alone right now." Not to say she wouldn't use Fira! I'm just musing. I can well imagine her being cranky at this stage of the journey, but you might try an experiement, getting the same things across only a little less directly, having her only half-say it. On the other hand I've just written a longer critique than the drabble!
Author\'s Response: I fixed the formatting now...I never knew exactly how terrible it was. XD; I'll have to try some of your pointers with my next fic. Thanks!