Ever wonder what the quiet kid's thinking about when he gets picked on? (Not for the squeamish)
(#) IcedHope 2005-09-18 03:35:47 AM
Well, I only have a couple of complaints. 1. I do not, brag about my killing ability. 2. Your dead on about the extra bullet. 3. It was a damn good story keep writing and one more thing. Great detail in the death scenes.
(#) Sage 2005-12-09 04:37:02 PM
Two words...Fucking Brilliant
Author\'s Response: ...thank you
(#) Cobalt-Blue 2006-01-02 08:18:30 AM
Not bad. There are a few typos that need to be addressed, and a couple of misspellings. Neat premis. Looking forward to reading more of your stuff.
Author\'s Response: No matter how many times I edit I suppose I am always going to miss a few mistakes but as long as you know what word I was trying to spell I see it as an issue but I’ll keep working on it, hope you enjoy the rest of my stories.
(#) dnalia 2006-11-26 04:25:51 PM
Your spelling sucks, but the story was pretty good. Nice ending.
thaks for bringing that to my attention, i went back and fixed it up a bit, i doubt i got everything though but i tried
(#) GR21 2006-11-29 07:44:45 PM
A little bloody with the cheerleaders but otherwise it's a dream come true
isn't it though :)
(#) Kairu-kun 2008-08-05 08:11:21 AM
Ahahahaha...I've had a dream alot like this before. Stupid cheerleaders...great job!