A shuppet's evolution.
(#) cjonbloodletter 2007-03-08 07:32:24 PM... I hate children. Don't know why, but they seem to like me. Sometimes I feel just like that doll, the only difference be-ing that if I tried to make the children disappear, legal action would be taken against me.
Very enlightening, by the way.
Cjon the Bloodletter
Conqueror of the Dark Realms
- Very nice! I've seen this kind of story before, but always forgetting that banette are evolved and having dolls be possessed directly by angry dead pokemon or such. Your description was excellent. The only bit that was slightly awkward was when you said "He felt at home inside the stuffing, warm and peaceful" and then "Blugh. It was cold, and wet." which seemed to be contradictory. Otherwise, it was very well done. I especially liked the detailed description of the damage done to the doll, and the ending was quite chilling.
Author's responseSquee! Facia review! Eheh... I owe you a few on FF.N, don't I? I'm so easily distracted.
I'm gratified that you like this piece. It was a quickie "sit down and write for an hour" that I did on a proboards RPG because no one was on at the time. It's not even spell checked, or anything (I did do a little cleaning before reposting it here, but not anything serious). I'm actually not satisfied with the ending. I thought it was a little too abrupt. However, if other people like it, I'm not going to complain too loudly. I'll take a look about spiffing up the awkward phraseology though. This is still a work that needs to be shined and buffed.