Harry learns something magical about relationships, Belle is in a bit of a spot.
(#) glazedlookineyes101 2007-03-07 05:44:45 AMWhoa, I'm actually the first one to review this chapter? Cool! Anyway, I'm actually glad you got those issues between the three of them out of the way. Still though, they are going to have to sort themselves out when they meet face to face. Cuddling and sleeping and 'sleeping' rights, hiding the fact that Bella will be staying with Harry from then on from the commanding officers, etc.
I hope Marietta will stop being a proxy and become another...err...bondmate (?) to Harry. In other words I read your author's notes at the end I am hoping you will change this to a Harry/Bella/Marie fic. Lol, being a fellow guy I know all about the whole two girls one guy fantasy and that's part of why I ask for that. However, I also like and want a 'Happy Ending' and I think the happy ending is one large Potter family. So what if Harry has two wives? It just shows he has a lot of love to go around (and that he likes older women, lol).
I know this is cliche but I'm looking forward to the next chapter. (If you don't mind me saying what is your updating schedule anyway? I can't figure it out)
Author's responseAs always, thanx for reading and responding, and I think you get the prize for fastest review, I posted the chapter around sunup here in Sunny Florida and next thing I knew, whoa, review. Cheers to all us early risers!
I think I can see Marie becoming another bondmate, funny thing, I put Marietta in the story just to have a somewhat familiar face and she became a major character very quickly. She wasn't even in the original outline. Go figure. As far as how to keep Belle off everyone's radar, one of my recurring themes is "hiding in plain sight." I hope you like my solution.
I try to update on Wednesdays and Weekends (sometimes Saturday, sometimes Sunday, it depends on whether I have a chapter ready or not. I will probably not be able to update this weekend, I will be traveling to New York to visit old friends and take in the Broadway show, Wicked. You may have heard about it. It’s a story of a witch that is perceived as wicked by all those around her but really, hey, waitaminit, that's my story line. . .
- Argh! A cliffhanger... well, I just hope Harry and the others makes it in time - and that Belle is able to do something "from the inside".
Personally I think Harry may have underestimated how difficult it will be to keep Bella out of Azkaban, but I'm looking forward to him going toe-to-toe with the Ministry.
I also can't wait for the reaction of his friends, the Order and the rest of the school (or the rest of the wizarding-world for that matter), when they find out about his unusual relationship - with whom - and his inpending fatherhood.
Keep up the good work, and update soon.
Author's responseThank you for reading and reviewing, will Harry and Company make it on time? Ask me no questions and I'll post you no spoilers. . . I think keeping Belle out of Azkaban will be easier than just keeping her safe - she has a LOT of ghosts in her past. As far as how the wizarding world and even his friends will view his relationships I hope to have a surprise or two coming, not all of them pleasant.
Cryptic enough for ya?
(#) harrysfriend 2007-03-07 06:54:00 AMFirst I would like to compliment you on this plot as well as how well written it is.
My concern, however, is for Ginny, Ron and Hermoine. I would like to think that the "treo's" friendship can still be saved and stay true to the plot and now that Harry seems to be beginning a polyamorous relationship, i hope Ginny can still have a place.
Author's responseThank you for reading and responding and for your kind words. Ginny, Ron and Hermione will show up in this story near the end of the summer there will be reactions to his bonding(s), and there will be some surprises, not all of them pleasant. True friends will stand with Harry, fair weather friends will be written out of the story.
(#) CoyoteScion 2007-03-07 09:32:56 AMgo figure I like a good Bella/Harry story but there should be more Marietta and Harry as well. Must be the former betrayer theme... who knows..
Author's responseThank you for reading and reviewing. Darn, you caught me. One of the threads running through out the story is betrayal but more importantly, the power of forgiveness. Now everyone will know. . . I feel a good dose of Marietta/Harry coming on along with some Belle/Harry/Marie as well.
- well harry better get to her soon before what shes about to do doesn't work too good.update soon
Author's responseTrue, Belle's about to have a rough spot here, but not as rough as Theodore I'd imagine. Remember Jones's gifts to Belle, she'll be okay to a point, but yeah, cavalry's comin'
(#) Geovanni_Luciano 2007-03-07 06:00:00 PMOK, Complaint.
She pulled open his robe and sat him down on the chair, then lifting the edge of her gown sat on his lap, enveloping him in the process. He leaned slightly back and she pistoned up and down with the vitality and exuberance of the youth she was.
Too bloody short. Take advantage of your rating and go for a few, or more than a few, descriptive paragraphs. It's not all that difficult. OK, end of complaint.
I look forward to your next chapter.
Author's responseThank you for reading and reviewing, and thanx for the constructive criticism, it is helpful. I will try to be a bit more descriptive (and keep it in the R category here) I have also posted a more explicit version on RestrictedSection.org, same penname, but I'm doing a significant rewrite as I go along - essentially self betaing. Betaing, is that a word? I’ll be out of town for the rest of the week, but will try to post the next chapter on Sunday.