So, a strange old man walks into a bar... (Pre-game.)
- Good for you, writing from Jessie's perspective. I always thought I rather liked her better than most of the main female characters from the game. She just seemed more real.
In the third paragraph you're missing a part of your sentence: "On the surface, he was just another poor old man from the slums, leaning over the bar with the bottle of beer she'd . . ."
I like the way Jessie is frightened of the man but also reluctant to cause a scene or appear to be impolite. It's a very human reaction and it's easy to identify with.
You wrote all of the characters so well though and I really enjoyed the thought of Hojo being so contemptuous about the skills of the Turks that he had to set out looking for Aeris himself. Your descriptions of Hojo are excellent. I think what made the entire story so refreshing was that it was being seen from a new perspective.
- It's refreshing to read a story about Jessie and... Hojo, of all people! I never thought I'd see them in a story together; a very excellent idea. I like your interpretation of Jessie - I always liked her character and was a bit disappointed that the game never went much into her. And Hojo's contempt for the Turks is a nice touch, as well. Great characterization and a very lovely read.