(#) smallsmiles 2010-12-03I'm not sure what to make of this...on one hand, it is pretty memorable.
but I think this is highly due to the unusual mix of inappropriate signals from the girl-character... I think this is not a good message to send to young girls-- we don't need to be female supporters only, and it's inappropriate for anyone (male or female) to manipulate young kids feelings in a romantic way-- but I expect that was not really thought out. It seems to me that she is indeed sexually abusing Akira, so I don't really approve of the message at all.
The writing style itself, there's nothing wrong with it. :) Just highly consider the kind of message you want to give to your audience when considering your characters.
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