Ginji is getting to be too much for Ban's self-control.
(#) Forst 2005-12-02 04:28:13 AMI thought this was lovely, and that Ginji was very Ginji, and Ban was very Ban. Besides that, the story flowed very well and the pacing was lovely. The writing too, was good, with few minor things such as this one line:
"He couldn't not have known that Ginji didn't want him..."
It has too many double negitives, and is awkward to read. Maybe if it was something like "He couldn't have thought Ginji didn't want him..." then it would work just fine, more clear and still convaying the idea well.
(#) trollopfop 2006-03-11 02:15:45 AMThis fic is like a hot-fudge sundae -- sweet enough to give me cavities, and with just a little bit of heat that left me feeling more warm and fuzzy than excited by the OMGBOYSEX! (Now, I love my smut, but this was so sweet I didn't mind the lack of detail at all.) And they're both beautifully in character. Nicely done. ^_^
- WOOHOO! I finally tricked the computer into logging me in so that I can review!! I've been reading fics on ficwad all night and I just NEEDED to find a way to log in(since my computer's evil and plotting against me) so that I could review THIS. ONE. I've read a bunch of your fics tonight that have tickled me pink, but this one in particular made me blush and hug my stuffed animal in joy. This is just what I needed before going off to bed thanks! ...I do admit that you kind of tend to over do the bold font a little in your fics. >.>