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Because This War Can't Last Forever

This story has recently undergone a massive overhaul. It's much better now, thanks to jerseygirlxx. - He's got to protect his little brother. For her. For all of them. [Novelization of a video.]

Category: My Chemical Romance - Rating: PG-13 - Genres: Angst, Drama - Characters: Bob Bryar, Frank Iero, Gerard Way, Mikey Way, Ray Toro, Other - Warnings: [?] - Chapters: 3 - Published: 2007/04/08 - Updated: 2007/08/12 - 2501 words - Complete

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• Because This War Can't Last Forever

  (#) jerseygirlxx 2007-04-08 02:02:11 PM

  I think your concept was good but it was kind of confusing.Alot of him and her and she and he. Maybe if you replaced some with a name it would flow better. I know some of it is for effect the whole mysterious 'she' gives it a nice feel. But when you keep refering to HIS brother it takes away from the effect. Sorry if this dosent make any sense.But I re read this a few times and thats the best way I can describe it.

  Author's response

  It makes sense. I understand. I was trying to keep it a little mysterious, and I even confused myself a few times rereading it. I know it's messy, but I just couldn't bring myself to type any names (stupid, I know). I'll try to go back and edit it so it's a little clearer.

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