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- Sparks? I like sparks!
I think you did a fabulous job in showing the readers why she was running and what she has hiding in her closet. I'm super excited to see these sparks!
Author's responseThey're nothing to get excited about too soon. Believe me, when I was writing the chapter that follow this one I got pretty annoyed with Lindsey haha.
(#) GwenMerlon 2007-04-10 09:34:34 PMOoo, the promise for the next chapter really got me excited... though I still gave the chapter an ambience rating because, you know, it felt so real and whatnot.
Ok, the insight was fantastic as well. I'm glad you brought Sarah into the story a little more... and making her human as well. Your characters are so believable!
But ugg, I feel like I keep saying the same things over and over again. Okay, let me try again:
I'm glad you aren't TOTALLY making this about a relationship. I love the personal struggle she has to deal with; overcoming her trust issues etc etc. Though, I know that this 'spark' that you speek of will make us all very happy, I'm just glad it has some background. See, now we can fully appreciate the connection between them after seeing how much of an ordeal it is for her to let her guard down.
Ok, that's probably just a jumbled mess. Very sorry. But I thought it was grand as always, my friend. I can't wait for more!!!
Author's responseI'm still deciding exactly what I want to do with Sarah later in the story. For now though, she'll pretty much just stay the same, plain and simple enough. And I don't think you're repeating yourself at all. And even if you are I still look forward to reading your reviews. I hoped, not making this story completely, wouldn't detract from the reader's interest. I often find myself getting caught up in the relationship part of stories that the rest of the plot loses substance. I couldn't let this happen with Lindsey. Thank you for noticing.
- I love this and her character. She's extremely realistic and I like that. :-)
Author's responseRealistic. Thank you. I think that's one of the best compliments I can get for this story. I'm always afraid I'm going to end up making the whole thing overdramatic.