We see a different side of Brody.
(#) GwenMerlon 2007-04-19 12:57:21 AMUmm, can you say amazing?!?!?!
"amazing amazing amazing!!!" Ok, definately possible to say.
So this was SUCH an exciting chapter!!! And I'm SOOOO glad Lola fought back. I was glad for once that someone did. I hate the stories where the guy tries to do something and the girl just cries and says 'no' without any real attempt to save herself. It was good because Brody, while still superior in strength and size, could still be brought down- yet not overly so. What I mean by that is, the opposite didn't happen either- the girl didn't COMPLETELY kick his ass because in most situations that isn't realistic either.
And I love cheese!!! I thought it was just fantastic. Especially the Patrick singing in the end. sigh So perfect, so perfect. Even Joe, Dirty, and Pete leaving so quietly to kick some ass was nice. I mean, I could just imagine it. Brody doesn't stand a chance.
Ok, well take my points, because you deserve them, you fantastic writer you!
Amazing amazing amazing!!!- See, still totally in my vocabulary.
Author's responseI love your vocabulary. I'm trying to keep my characters as realistic as possible. None of that Mary-Sue crap. And the fight scene was hard too because I wanted to make it look like she might not get away, but I certainly didn't want her giving him roundhouse kicks to the face either. And can I say that I love your input? Might I say it's amazing? :)
(#) poisonedhalo 2007-04-19 04:40:19 AMok.. brody is officially and ass... and as usual patrick is officially a total sweetheart. ur fic is the only remaining one ive been reading for a long time. do not end it anytime soon. its too good to go
Author's responseThank you, Halo. That means a lot to me. I don't plan on ending it anytime soon. :)
(#) luckysgc921 2007-04-19 04:56:10 AMswooooonnnnnnnnn
i LOVED it. it wasn't cheesy in the slightest.
umm...make sure Bridget doesn't stop them TOO fast ok? He should be feeling some pain. (Pete gets to kick asses a lot lately huh? lol)
I seriously adored it hun. hehe. wonderful as usual. and you totally threw down with this one. :)
Author's responseI told you I was going to bring it. I had to pull out some Elton John to help me out though. And do you think Bridget is going to STOP them? You obviously need to get to know yourself better. HA! just kidding, she'll probably keep them from breaking his face. Or she'll help, who knows.
(#) whatkatydid 2007-04-19 03:15:18 PMI really want it to rate it hot, just for the ending but given the attempts by Brody, I didn't want anyone to get the wrong idea.
I love you Kyle, and I'm in love with the word Lothario, can't believe you used it! Awesome.
Lola is strong, I love how you portrayed that. And Joe's cameo was great too! lol ( joke ) Seriously though, nice cameo ( Damnit, another joke ) Shut up wench ( got it..) ok...
Author's responseI would have settled for a HOT. Now, are you in love with Lothario or are you just shocked that my vocab extends beyond four letter words? Lothario is a great word. I don't get to use it as often as it deserves. Lola rocks. Once Joe reaches her level of awesome, I'll write him in more often. :)
- Lists Lists Lists! I have one for you!
First: You have successfully made me giddy. I haven't been giddy since, well just earlier when JB was batting in the 8th, but that's another time. I can't believe you had P-rick singing Tiny Dancer. That deserves you many a smooches from me!
Second: Pete going to defend Lola....Hott. Yup, that's with two t's.
Third: I've decided to quit writing. Everyone's absolutely amazing attention to detail has put me to shame. I can't keep up with you folk, so I'm D-U-N.
Fourth: Here are some smooches and points for your sweet ass! Enjoy!
Author's responseWoooo for lists! I knew you'd like Tiny Dancer. But what is this about quitting? CeCe, you're a delicious writer. Don't make me fly out to Minnesota (I hope I spelled that right) and hurt some people.
(#) FrostedGlass 2007-04-19 10:36:25 PMHA! I could rate this time. Probably has to do with the fact that I am not reading this half a year late...
I am a sucker for boys beating up other boys because they've mistreated a lady.
And, btw, instead of "beacon" I read "bacon of morality and loyalty".
Author's responseYou are reviewing on time, aren't you? Weird. Now if I can only get you to update once and awhile.
I should have written bacon...damn it. Loyal breakfast meat is just funny.
(#) FallOutAimee 2007-04-21 11:42:11 AMokay so its just taken me 2 days to read all of your story and i have to say its great :D i cannot wait for the next chapter [which will hopefully be soon lol]
I love it =]
Author's responseWell thank you Aimee for taking the time to read my story. I really appreciate it. I should be updating soon...er, that was a lie, but I'm going to try my best. :)