- The story itself is good, very good, and I added it to my alerts for this reason. You do seem to have a problem with adding in articles though (I know some languages do not have them - is your native tongue one of them?) which I would be glad to help with, if you like. If so, contact me, I'd be happy to help you with this little detail in an otherwise fine story.
- What a great second chapter;
I don't know who Lucas Vader is, but I like the idea of Harry changing his name, so that no-body could find him.
So Harry's got a new wand, cool. What is the fucking Phoenix trying to hide from Harry.
What the hell is the voice in Ron's head about