"Yes." Save that word for the one you love.
- You don't know how elated I was when I saw this fanfic was updated!...I was screaming at my best friend on MSN: OMG ONE OF MY FAVE FANFICS ON FICWAD HAS JUST BEEN UPDATED...lol. I think she stopped responding to me for a few moments so I had time to calm down...
That was ultimately H-O-T. =) You have a talent with lust and words, you know that? It's so fabulous. It's great that it's fast-paced, but at the same time, so tantalizing that the reader just wants the two of them to be together already...(well, officially, anyways...)
So keep writing!