The Templar have come out of the shadows. The battle between light and dark now takes on a new look. Conspiracy, betrayal, and a decent helping of buttkicking all around. HarryFleur in later chapte...
- its was hard to review chap 7, not that we didn't enjoy it. its just that we didn't have enough background infomation on the Tempar. anyway, it was gd.
i like rachel, look forward to how she possibly help the bonds between fleur and harrry.
the swords sound cool, but more detail is require i guess. i still don't have a clear picture of it. so jacky-oh still doesn't know what has been happening. hmmmmm....
poor tonks, why is she always the one in trouble. lol... look forward to see more of her. i would of thought that tonks and fleur would have been close friends. they are similar to some extent. and about the same age group... anyway congrats...
ps. look forward to see how bill takes all of this... ;)
Author's responseThanks this review helped a lot. I was worried that chapter 7 was hated. Anyway I'll try to work on Marcell's new sword. But really if you can picture what a crabs claw looks like and add saw teeth to it, you have its basic design. And no Jacky-oh (lol) still doesn't know whats going on. He learns in the next chapter. ALSO I have finally planned out the chapter where he learns he is Harry, that will be a celebration in the making. I really like Tonks, and try to give her all the time I can, but as of right now I cant find a good place for her and I'm not going to force a place because it wouldn't flow with the story.
- Definitely an interesting chapter as they escapees rest and recover. It will be interesting to see how quickly they meet up with Jericho. The new sword sounds interesting, it sounds to this reader as if Magic understood his needs and used the power he put into the ore to shape a sword that would meet his needs, both present and upcoming.
Author's responselol you're either really insightful or Im getting predictable. Anyway you're half right in your theory behind Marcell's sword. Alaman (who has been quiet as of late) will come back with more explanations after things settle down.
- Another great chapter... keep going and update soon.
Wonder what it is about the new sword...
I have a feeling Wizard-kind in general and Dumbledore/The Order will be quite as quick to bow to The-Boy-Who-Lived-and-Went-Missing as some hope...
Who is attacking the Ministry? Will it fall? Will the other three Templars (and Initiates) join the fight? What will happen if it does fall -- what will it mean for Hogwarts?
Keep up the good work.
Author's responselol shame on you I cant answer those questions with out spoiling future bits of the story. It kinda sucks cause with the wait between me writing/updating and the events in the story things seem MUCH longer than they really are. This is definatley a story people should consider rereading when its finished since actions and events wont seem to take nearly as long as they do right now. (Teaser spoiler) In Chapter 3 Alaman said something that comes into play next chapter. And when you think about how long ago I posted chapter three, such a comment would seem irrelavent and overdue when its really not. Thats one of the flaws in this story, I leave vague cluse throughout the story to hint at things later on, but you really dont take note of them at the time and end up forgetting them because of how long it takes to get to what I hint at. Its like the Trelawny predicted Voldemort rise in book 3 but the event didn't take place until the end of book 4. Anyway I think I've said enough =P
- Insightful? I don't think so and you're not that predictable. It's probably more likely that I've simply got a large database to work from than most, I've been reading fantasy and science fiction for some 45 or years,
Author's responseHehe I guess that would play a part in it. Anyway, you are close, so I'll give a hint. I don't like leaving plot devices (such as Marcell's sword) up to inanimate things (like magic). Magic does have a part in it, but not from the angle you are looking at.
Here's the hint.
x,y chromosomes. Its vague and if you don't figure it out, it doesn't matter. But this hint will make a lot of sense when Alaman explains. Hehe I wonder if Dumbledore was like me when he was younger. Considering the vague hints, knowing everything thats going on (as far as this story is concerned), and being jovial about it all.