Gerard misses Frank.
(#) jerseygirlxx 2007-06-02 05:41:04 PMThis was kinda like your other story the "i remember one'; I like the repetiviness again. This one was more anger filled I guess. they way he kept saying fuck I miss over and over again. Okay maybe not angerish but regretfulish? anger at himself for letting Frank go? I dont get the feeling Frank is dead cause theres no sadness- not death sadness atleast... If you wanna expand it Id fill it out a little. add why hes so angry/remorseful or whatever towards Frank... Tack it onto the end of a paragraph - imiss blah blah and now hes with her... Or you know what would be really sweet! if you add a line at the end like -Fuck...I wonder if he misses me...
Anyway... as for your parents the only thing I can suggest which may sound stupid but uh- have you told them you write fan fics? youre really good and I dont think your parents would want to limit your creativity. As for ideas.. I think that you write really well one-shots. (crossover is where you bring in other characs. in your story- that really do exist- ususally on here its uh fall out boy for some reason. (mmm pete) anyway um thats a mcr/fall out boy crossover.) But for inspiration I would say listen to song a few time and focus on what the emotion is and then apply it to the story. Youre a good writer and I hope you post more. ----xoxo
Author's responseYay i love it when you review its so helpful!
okay, ill remember the elaboration tip for next time, thanks!
As for my folks, they know i write fanfiction, but not exactly what i write it about. They did before SORT OF because my teachers called them, but they dont exactly know everything.
- where is Frankie? anyways, i love the repetitiveness... i do that a lot in my stories. i like your stories, but i suck major ass at writting vampirey ones :S i hope you update your story soon =]
Author's responsei will as soon as i type at least 5 more chapters, so it might take a while, so sorry! i just need to get caught up on the typing a bit... yup, thanks for reading!
(#) MCR_dynamite 2007-10-05 08:08:05 AMI thought I reviewed this ages ago, last time I read it!!!!
That story was kinda sweet in a way! How he explained the fluffy memories and it was sad about the "I miss" thing! :( It was awesome!!!
Anyway, I just thought I'd tell you again that you rock at being an author! And I, honest and truly, would buy anything that you published!
(#) Emo_musik_chick 2009-01-20 06:46:47 AMAww!
That was adorable. I've finally found someone whose entire profile is nothing but Frerard xDD I've got lots of reading to do- and good ratings to be awarded-, let's just say that =D
I would, however, love to know where Frankie was...you could maybe do a second chapter from Frank's point of view, talking about the exact same thing. You know, how he misses Gee. I dunno, that just seems like it'd be cute to me, bringing it full-circle...
But either way, that was lovely.