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Girl Talk

by Darkenchanter 3 Reviews

Zelda and Malon share a little girl talk (F/F)

Category: Zelda - Rating: PG-13 - Genres: Romance - Characters: Zelda, Other - Warnings: [!] - Published: 2007/07/03 - Updated: 2007/07/03 - 2143 words - Complete

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  • Girl Talk

    (#) noisee 2007-07-06 03:21:51 PM

    I like your use of similies (similie? I think so), like when you described Zelda's habit with the tassel as making her seem like a child; that really helped the image in my head.

    I also like how the queen feels so.. detached, when she starts to talk to Malon, and when she's rejected at the end. It's so regal and elegant and fitting for her!

    I just had an eensie little problem with the sectioning; one paragraph would describe something and then suddenly shift in its focus- but that's just my opinion.

    All in all, this story made me pretty... sad, in a quiet little way. And that's good. Nice work. :)

    Author's response

    I'm glad you liked the story so much. I was really trying hard with my descriptions in this one, but it sounds like it paid off. I was a little surprised to get a review so soon, this being the first F/F zelda story on the site (to my knowledge) and this being such a small comunity and all. I might write some more in the future, if I get some inspiration.
  • Girl Talk

    (#) Annej 2007-07-09 01:01:09 PM

    I love your writing style, your words flow so smoothly, it's enjoyable to read.

    I look forward to seeing more from you =) wonderful job!
  • Girl Talk

    (#) Lovelocked 2007-10-02 07:38:15 PM

    Wow, quite impressive. Details were perfect. Would you mind making a sequel to this?

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