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Virtual Reality
(#) fruit_addict 2007-07-11
Ok, buddy...That paragraph STILL is screwedish. Here's how I'd put it.
"Myst was panicking. She was losing him. She tilted his chin up, opened his mouth, and blew into his mouth. One...Two blows. Then she went to his chest. She placed one fist over the other interlocking her fingers then pressed down as hard as she could one, two, up to fifteen times. She had to help Jake breathe again. After the third time of this rotation, she put her head on Jake's heart, listening and feeling. Thank God, he was breathing. She was a little surprised when her head was almost thrown off as Jake coughed. Jake tried to sit up then thought he was going to sufficate when Myst embraced him in a hug. He put his head on her shoulder, eyes closed."
mwa ha ha now the world will know how to do cpr! (or at least the part of the world that reads your story)
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