- Ah, Shoki it to me.
I find it a bit ironic that your spoiler warning contains a spoiler. You might want to look into that.
Clunky in places, but you seem to have a lot of their key phrases down. Anya in particular seems nicely IC.
You repeat yourself a little bit. "Dark look," "large sword" and "folklore" all happen more than once, and that's not good for a 'fic this length. Also, referring to "the brunette" was a bit vague. The word usually refers to a female, so I was wondering whether you meant Anya or someone.
I actually like the idea of Xander as a regular guy with no powers. I find that it highlights his courage. However, this was an interesting take.
(#) darkflame1516 2006-03-06wow. this was very interesting. i liked the myth, most people wouldnt see Xander as a "demon queller". i think that u should do a sequel or followup on this, simply because it is such an original idea. i also thought it was great how everyone seemed well in character. i felt as if this was a real episode. way to go, i'm impressed.
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