(#) Enelya_Linde 2006-03-27Yes, the inconsidfjhsdlkjd GAH! Cannot spell, can I? Inconsistencies... likely spelled wrong, but not the point. The ' ' 's in contractions are a bane to any fandom, and a drawback to any fic. I found your fic somewhat original, yes, if based upon Movie!Narnia, and the line was well-done. I enjoyed.
- I admit when I started reading this I thought it was going to be a Mary-Sue, but you walked the line well between OC and 'Sue. :) This was a nice fic and quite sweet (and it helps that Edmund's my favourite character :P). The only problem with it, I think, was some missing punctuation, such as 's. Apart from that, well done!
(#) SayoriWakaba 2009-02-26At first I was confused by the beginning, because it sonded like a Mary-Sue, but then it changed and it was very moving. I love how you captured Phantasma's innocence and portrayed it. I absolutely love any stories that have edmund in them ( and you ask why, PSHH ;D), and this one is definitely the best I've read so far. I love it ! Please keep writing!
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