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A Bitter Betrayl

by InuKag 1 Reviews

poetry.

Category: Poetry - Rating: PG-13 - Genres: Angst, Romance - Characters: - Published: 2006/01/22 - Updated: 2006/01/23 - 69 words - Complete

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A Bitter Betrayl

(#) Shobs 2006-02-17 05:34:25 PM

A beautiful poem. The only part I can think to critise is the repeated use of "ripped" in the last lines. It takes away from the effect, a bit.

Author\'s Response: Thank you haha I didn't even realize that I had done that. You are right. I changed it, it shouldnt sound so repeatitive now. thanks!

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