(#) secret_philosopher 2008-01-19hey i like the plot of this story, however, you need to word on your grammar and spelling. Some people say that these things are not necessary for people to enjoy a story, but i disagree. it is very distracting to have a lot of mistakes. it causes ambiguous meaning. Usually i would not have read a story that has so many mistakes, but it has a lot of potential and you portrayed the characters well. nice job overall.
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