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Ceteris Paribus

by Lyanvis 2 Reviews

Ceteris Paribus. A latin phrase meaning all things remaining equal. Because they are just two sides of the same coin, of the same coin, of the same...

Category: Naruto - Rating: G - Genres: Drama - Characters: Itachi,Orochimaru - Warnings: [!] [?] - Published: 2008/02/16 - Updated: 2008/02/16 - 2403 words

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  • The Oracle

    (#) Saphira 2008-03-02 08:18:28 PM

    >.>

    I don't think you really want my thoughts on this chapter if you're so proud of it.

    All I have for you are two questions.

    Do you even know what Itachi and Orochimaru act like?
    and
    Do you know what a Mary Sue is?
  • The Oracle

    (#) Novocaine 2008-04-22 06:34:35 PM

    I like the contrast between Amaya and Lyanvis a lot. Guileless/wicked, loving/bloodthirsty. Very pretty. You need to watch out for tense changes - there was a lot of that in the first part - and random capitalization. Other than that, I have no criticism. You really should just change the names and make it an original story, though.

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