Categories > Anime/Manga > Pokemon > Birds
(#) Welsh-Charizard 2006-02-13Wow, I guess some birds can really suprise you. Loved the short, to the point back story and going through the Johto gyms backwards, hmmm I may consider that myself later in my story, although I hope my character doesn't end up arrogant like the one in this story. Great work.
Author\'s Response: Heh, yeah, I don't think Josie's going to get into trouble that way. She's much too nice. Really, I just wrote that in order to figure out why gym leaders always challenge you with pokemon of just the right level, and are inevitably beaten. Anyway, thanks for reviewing the one shot. It's very much appreciated.
(#) Giant_Brother 2006-07-28I like this, it gives an interesting view on what the gym leaders in earlier cities are actually capable of. It was well written and you got inside the head of the trainer narrating.
Author's responseThank you very much. I'd really like to see more gym leader fics out there, as the gym leaders don't seem to have anything to do, but hang around and wait for people to beat them. Someone should speak up, I feel.
- This was incredibly well done and original. Your trainer is somewhat arrogant yet you really don't go overboard with it, especially since it's not like it's baseless. You can almost see how it develops as she keeps winning again and again. She perfectly captures the sort of attitude a lot of game players have without going into caricature, and the narration is just perfect. I really loved the way you summed up the different places and battles. A lot of people fall back on general, forgettable description, but yours were so vivid and telling. The bit about the Whirl Islands was really memorable. The small details of the battle were brilliant too, like Falkner giving orders on which of the dodrio's heads was to lead and the murkrow's waterproof wings, as was the general flow. A lot of people write the whole trainer-who-takes-a-fall thing with them being utterly crushed by someone well above their level, and it's much more impressive when it's done as a close battle where you can see them lose and how they could have won.
(#) Faeriegirl 2007-05-15Another amazing one! I am in love with your descriptions of Jhoto, it is SO the best area, gold/silver/crystal were the best games I think... You make the place seem real instead of just a place in a game. I really want to go run around Jhoto now, but I lost my game :'( O yea, do one about Ecrutiac cos it is the best city in any of the games ever :) Oh, and you pointed out something I've never noticed, how much more modern Kanto is. Yea, rambling now, so thanks for an amazing story!
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