Categories > Original > Fantasy > Ashar
(#) Thelionwaits 2008-03-30Hmmmm...interesting. Your story is prett yoriginal, usually the villain in a case like this goes after the protagonist just so he can kill him. That or, as you have used the plot device, wants to use and then kill the protagonist. This time it's different, Instead of "conjuring the ultimate weapon" or "charming the most beautiful woman to become my queen", et al. has been abandonded for a more practical use. WHat's up with the animals? I don't think that's ever been done before. Good choice!
It also looks like you've been keeping EXTREMELY close tabs on your work, I haven't seen any spelling or grammatical errors.
Well done, keep going. I would like to read more.
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