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• Harry Potter and the Ultimate Warrior.

  (#) red_jacobson 2008-05-14

  okay; better on the size of the chapters, please, get a beta reader, there are some nasty spelling errors in this chapter; a couple that stand out in memory are "Threw" when "Through" is the word that you probably meant. I'm referring to when Dumbledore tries to use Legimency on Harry and Harry warns him off. Also, when Harry tells Draco to enjoy Azkaban; because he's going to tell the "Aura's"? I'm pretty sure you meant Aurors.
  
  Otherwise, decent chapter, and I'm liking the Harry/Hermione interaction and looking forward to more.
  
  Red

• Harry Potter and the Ultimate Warrior.

  (#) skytime12 2008-05-14

  yes badass to the bone i will keep reading if u keep wrighting
  

• Harry Potter and the Ultimate Warrior.

  (#) LDA 2008-05-14

  liking the fic, I just hope you don't fall into the same Harry/Hermione, Harry/Ginny, Harry/Luna or Harry/Cho ships at least find someone who is Harry's equal and not some well known empty character like those previously stated, go someone new and different, maybe a OFC so you can build a real believable person that you don't have to worry about sticking to previous notions of them.

• Harry Potter and the Ultimate Warrior.

  (#) grookill 2008-05-14

  This is a fun fic to read, but as other reviewers mentioned, you need to keep an eye out for homonyms and near-homonyms.
  
  Personally, I like the Harry/Hermoine interaction. Maybe she's his soulmate or whatever, but if she is, I hope you'll make sure that Harry has some "fun" on the side.
  
  Story wise, I think you need to be careful that you haven't made Harry too powerful. The way you've written it so far, I would think Harry could use Voldemort to mop the floor. If that's the case, what's the challenge, and what are the risks? Powerful!Harry is cool and fun to read. UberPowerful!Harry gets boring after a while.

• Harry Potter and the Ultimate Warrior.

  (#) jjracer24 2008-05-14

  Great start to this story, looking forward to seeing which direction you take it. I like that Harry isn't taking crap from anyone.

• Harry Potter and the Ultimate Warrior.

  (#) snowfox 2008-05-16

  great story i like the way you have made harry strong a new twist please keep up the great work
  

• Harry Potter and the Ultimate Warrior.

  (#) Elfwyn 2008-05-28

  Well a fun storyline as Harry sounds like Hercules (I don't think that has been done) but the spelling is atrocious. You seriously need a beta. One other thing, what is a 600+ year old man doing in a dorm and flirting with fourteen year old girls?

• Harry Potter and the Ultimate Warrior.

  (#) chanewt906 2009-05-28

  Well, come on; what happens next?????
  Really good start, hoping for more.

• Harry Potter and the Ultimate Warrior.

  (#) quilla04 2010-07-30

  this seems to be a fairly interesting plotline, I don't think I've read one like this before.
  
  the only drawback in the spelling errors, but if you like I could read through it for you and correct those.

• Harry Potter and the Ultimate Warrior.

  (#) LadyElena18 2011-11-01

  Love this story so far! can't wait to read more!

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