Chapter 10 of my story! Hope you like it as much as I did!
- Another great chapter mate, I love how the story is going, so when does Harry/Fluer start and when does Harry get Tracey as a slave and why? Also how is he going to treat her? I hope to see some female/female action in the story. Also with some threesomes :D
I hate claffhangers, I think that's why I do them myself. :P
- Keep it up you are doing grate. I like that while Harry is darker he is not evil it makes sence. Are we going to find out why Ron & Hermione sold him out and was it Ron & Hermione or just Ron who wrote that letter? Keep it up and thanks for writting.
(#) AgentOrange1986 2008-05-14 07:42:04 AMA week had passed in the mansion, and Harry had been training with Merlin excessively. Merlin had cast a time spell on the whole mansion, so for every hour that passed outside it, only one minute had passed inside it. So basically, the last week was like a month for Harry, so he was able to learn a lot.
That just doesn't make sense.
1 minute in the mansion = 1 hour outside
Harry is in the mansion, training.
month in the mansion = 60 months outside = 5 years for the rest of the world
Five years does not equel 1 week.
(#) retardedrockstar 2008-05-14 08:11:27 AMThe sentence:
"She was utterly perfect, and in that very minute, Harry fell in love with her!"
Doesn't that sound simply wrong. Other than that nice work and thanks for the quick updates.
PS: As DRAGEN said whens the smut coming??
- Still here, and still enjoying the story. No, it's not much of a cliffie. You described her too well, and now i'm eagerly awaiting the first confrontation with the Order. I just hope he remembers to make sure that the Order can't see his account balances. Bank secrecy goes for the lovely goblins as well, right?
Keep at it!
- Thank you for giving harry some backbone and stopping the waterworks. the only thing about the chapter that bothered me was the time spell and harrys' height he's just too tall you mabe him 6'7 it would have been more believable if haeer was 6'1 or 6'2 as the most. but anyway you are getting better with your writing so keep up the good work. and one last thing hermione betraying harry just doesn't feel right are you sure she wasn't influenced by an outside force.