Here's Chapter 11 guys! I REALLY liked it, and I hope you do, too!
(#) HarryGinnyTonks 2008-05-14 07:05:14 PMinteresting. The HarryFleur interaction was a bit too sappy, fairy-tale for me.
1 - try to avoid in-chapter author notes. They really break up the rhythm of the story.
2 - I noticed a bit too many exclamation marks. From what I have seen, they really shouldn't be used other than to emphasize dialogue (i.e, "Get away from her!") Exclamation marks in battle description tend to make me feel as if it is less mature writing. Periods do their job well; trust them.
Good chapter, try to lengthen them, as I enjoy longer chapters where I can really sit down and enjoy it.
Waiting for the next chapter, good luck writing!
- i think you've found your literary mojo! good action and good chapter length. i liked your fic from the beginning but i can already see big improvements in your plot development and writing style. keep up the good work. im looking forward to the next update!
(#) TxA_GunFighter 2008-05-21 10:46:43 AMGood chapter, some times you have to kill to protect others. The bad guys have all the choices and leave yu with few choices. Anything that happens to them because of that is THEIR fault. Loose no sleep over killing them.
(#) Geovanni_Luciano 2008-05-25 09:44:19 AMI liked it. Good action scene. AGAIN I will complain about the length so please make a note of my complaint. That said, I also think that you might want to expound upon Harry's training with Merlin. You came up with some good stuff, but you didn't really go into too much detail as to his training.