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• The Return of the Boy Who Lived

  (#) Cateagle 2008-06-11

  It's good to see a Dumbles humble enough to accept that he might have messed up most thoroughly and then seek to make recompense. I do like the way they're thinking and I suspect that between the efforts with Amelia and their training, Tom's not going to have near as easy a time this year, should he manage to come back this tiem.

  Author's response

  That's the plan! And I'm glad you like what I've done with Albus.
  
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• The Return of the Boy Who Lived

  (#) Wonderbee31 2008-06-11

  I really find myself liking this Albus, who seems to be at least trying to do the right thing, rather than the canon, who seemed determined to make it work one way or another. Just the way that he at least seems willing to help Harry with his "family" is a positive step imo, and will look forward to this proactive version of Albus here, rather than the laid back, let's wait for it, wait foorr ittt, version.

  Author's response

  Thanks; this Albus is fun to write as well.
  
  I'll have some more posted this weekend.
  
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• The Return of the Boy Who Lived

  (#) Alatoic01 2008-06-11

  Nice chapter, will be interesting to see Dumbledore actually doing what he should have done in canon.
  
  Hope Harry can still free Dobby, will be a nice punch to the Malfoys, also maybe Harry can still get lost when going to diagon Alley and hear about the "trinkets" they have in a special room that need to be sale.
  
  hope to read more soon.
  
  cheers.
  
  MAC

  Author's response

  Thanks; I'm glad you are enjoying the story.
  
  I'll be posting the next chapter this weekend.
  
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• The Return of the Boy Who Lived

  (#) whatareyouevensaying 2008-06-11

  Solid work on this one, I'm looking forward to more.

  Author's response

  thanks; I'll be posting the next chapter this weekend!
  
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• The Return of the Boy Who Lived

  (#) morriganscrow 2008-06-12

  Nice one!
  Your redemption of Albus was well handled, and the outcome logical.
  I eagerly look forward to the next chapter.

  Author's response

  Thanks, I'm glad you liked it. I'll be posting at least one new chapter by Sunday night.
  
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• The Return of the Boy Who Lived

  (#) Wolfric 2008-06-12

  Excellent chapter. I continue to enjoy your story. Thanks for writing. W.

  Author's response

  thanks, I'm glad you are enjoying the story, I'm having a lot of fun writing it.
  
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• The Return of the Boy Who Lived

  (#) Anaknisatanas 2008-06-12

  I'm glad that Harry won't have to go back to the Dursley's. Neville is also doing well preparing his two friends for what is to come. I look forward to your next update.

  Author's response

  Thanks, I'll have another chapter posted by Sunday night.
  
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• The Return of the Boy Who Lived

  (#) WinterRayne 2008-06-15

  I Love how you set this fic up cannot wait to read more.

  Author's response

  thanks; I'm glad you are enjoying it. I'll be posting another chapter before I go to bed tonight.
  
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• The Return of the Boy Who Lived

  (#) pstibbons 2008-06-15

  Good meeting with Dumbles. Makes a change for him not to be manipulative.
  
  Writing style - I think you could add more descriptions. For example, the scene where Albus gets a drink after watching the memories - how many glasses? What kind of alcohol? What kind of flames did he belch? What sound came with them? Did he first make to drink from a glass, then shrug and drink from the bottle directly?
  
  Perhaps those aren't the best questions, but you get the idea (I hope).
  
  As for Ginny, it is indeed hard to see how she would care for anything other than the idea of being Mrs BWL. It's a lot easier to see Neville with someone else, like Luna or Padma. Someone that Hermione and Harry can get along with without having to be worried about being stabbed in the back.
  
  Does Hermione have a sister or cousin? (And that's assuming you want Neville to remain heterosexual.)
  
  Hope Ron remains shunted aside. It's not like he's ever going to have the discipline required to learn Occlumency even when he's older, right? And by that time, the new trio will be such a unit that he won't be able to break into it. PErhaps he'll become a friend - like Dean and Seamus - but it's hard to see him becoming more.

  Author's response

  Thank you for your well thought out review! I appreciate that you took the time to make some suggestions. I agree that at times my descriptions are a bit sketchy, but, I will work on it. I'll admit, I find, when I do put in descriptions, I have a tendency to 'tell' rather than 'show' but I will work on it.
  
  I agree with the Ginny situation; she's too much of a BWL fangirl to be able to work well as Neville's partner. As for Neville, well, I've got a couple of ideas, and one of my reviewers on another forum pointed something out to me that I had overlooked. Right now Neville is mentally and emotionally 18 years old, next year 19 years old, do you really think that an 11 year old, no matter what their prior relationship, would be able to hold his interest?
  
  Ron is basically going to fulfill the Neville from Canon role, a friend, but not somebody who is in the thick of things.
  
  Thanks again for your review, and I'll post a new chapter tomorrow, I took the weekend off from writing, and got caught up on my reading.
  
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