Review for A smile can change everything

A smile can change everything

(#) tragicWithACapital_T 2007-07-11

heyy, i'm liking so far :)

POOR FRANKIE!
you can put another character in there named Emily, she'd gladly date Frank ;)

i like the story but i keep getting confused about how you say stuff like:

"You looked at Gerard and blushed." (for example even though I don't think it's in the story.)

it's just easier to read something when YOU're not the character... like:

"I looked at Gerard and blushed."
or
"Carrie looked at Gerard and blushed."

idk, i just found it odd how you wrote "YOU"

otherwise great story! loving the plot. poor merch girl! haha
thinks to self- must become a merch girl