Review for Wild

Wild

(#) ladyjasmine 2007-10-22 12:06:41 PM

Interesting story. You've set the tone and the story with the minimal of just using conversation.

While I found it a little difficult to follow at first (just remembering when the captain was speaking and when the ship was speaking), I think it would help if there was more moments to indicate when the captain was speaking or being addressed. Maybe a few more moments of addressing a high ranking officer?

Other than that, I was surprised to realize it was a ship. Nice twist.

Author's response

Hmm. People have suggested different fonts or colors before, which I don't care for because I think they would detract from the minimalism of it. But peppering a few 'sir's throughout the ship's speech might provide some nice reference points. Something worth thought, in any case.

Thanks for reading it, I'm glad you it.

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