It's not a bad effort for your first fanfic but...
There wasn't really a plot to it. You seem to cut out alot of stuff and i agree that Saix doesn't have alot of fans behind him (neither does Demyx for that matter!).
There isn't much to criticise (T_T sorry) because it was such a short story. Im sure that if you continue this story and have a few chapters, then you might just look for the "critisism" you want.
Nice idea about the wolf.
if you want ideas to tell a full on story, then read some of "takers" or mine (The End of the World). Our chapters are long and Takers stories are incredible. usually if you want to write a story or just one chapter, it is a minimal of 5000 words. No pressure.
Good luck with your writting - i look forward to see more stories from you.
(Dont worry I was new before :D)
Author's response
thanks! actually, my problem is that i can't really do one shots. or short stories for that matter. if i start something, usually it becomes some epic novel. ^^ but they never get finished....
i'd love to check out your stories. actually, if they're in the KH section, i probably have read them. lol.
yeah, my friend said that he acted a lot like a werewolf, so i decided to make him one.
that same friend and i are working on this huge story that we've had going steadily for over a year now. we really hope it's good, because we tried hard to give every new person a backstory and different personality. if i ever put it up (only the first 2 chapters are done, but whatever.) do you think you would read it? and help us?