You did good displaying all of the characters' personalities! And just because i'm your friend doesn't mean I'll let you by without a few words of... um, 'advice'.
Type it on Microsoft Word first, then use spell check, print it off, proofreed it, make the corrections, print, proofreed, and make corrections again, then post it. It will look a lot better if you do these.
Hey! I managed to give advice without sounding like a jackass! But just wait 'till we see each other at school again...
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