Review for Chicago, the fang-like thorn in my side

Chicago, the fang-like thorn in my side

(#) MyChemicalFangirl 2009-06-30

Suspeeeeense! XD
Looove the story still. :D
Oh, and if that's Victoria from Cobra, then I've always wanted to hit her for some reason. ;P
Thankyou for including me, again, I'll try and keep up with this!
Sorry for takeing so long to actually get to reading this though,
I have another 5 stories going right now, and lots of homework, and school.XD
I would say one thing, mabye try splitting the paragraphs up a bit more?
It's just haveing it all in bulks confuses my fragily stupid mind a little. XD
Thankss!
Christie,xo
Love you!
Cannot wait for the update. ':D

Author's response

Hey no worries! I'm gonna take the paragraph thing on.