Hi, I wasn't sure why it sounded funny, then i found out it was in spanish frist and was tanlated into Engish, and i read it again and it's really good! Can't wait to see more stories by you.
Author's response
hi,
thanks, i will try to do another in this week if i can..
sorry if a maked some mistakes because i talk spanish.
i know english but is not like a prefecional, and i am lerning francais lol :)