Okay. Here's the down low. I like your idea. And I can tell you're new at this. Just like me. I'll help you, mkay? Spacing. Please space every paragraph. I don't want to get lost in your masterpiece. Punctuation. Please after every coma, period, ect. Put a space. And don't rush a story. Authors and writers are teases; they draw the reader in, play with them a little, then leave; with the reader wanting more.