Review for Of Blood and Soul
Of Blood and Soul
(#) Esbee 2006-03-01 03:43:07 PM
Interesting third chapter. So the feeling is not entirely one-sided. To offer some constructive criticism, I think Envy's response to Ed's telling her to go to hell was a tad cliched. Not entirely out of character, but cliched. You continue to have an excellent grasp on the characters though. I also think calling Envy Adam when he was at his weakest, in a mortal situation, was a nice touch.
Author\'s Response: Thanks so much for the feedback. ^_^ I was worried about the cliche factor, but I also can't see Envy resisting the urge to make a snarky comment. Hmm. Maybe I just need to work more on the clever snark. ^_~
Author\'s Response: Thanks so much for the feedback. ^_^ I was worried about the cliche factor, but I also can't see Envy resisting the urge to make a snarky comment. Hmm. Maybe I just need to work more on the clever snark. ^_~
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