This is an outstanding start. I can't wait to read more.
I'm sure you've already realized this, but there's a formatting error that seems to come at random. Just scroll through one of the chapters and I'm sure you'll spot it. It randomly inserts a series of numbers and other characters. Pretty weird.
Author's response
Whoops! My bad, but I have an excuse: My MS Works is incompatable with... well, nearly everything. Anyway, that problem is now taken care of. Thanks for your review! Random Shinobi