Intresting. It could have been a very good story if you'd toned down Harry's amazing insights to something aproaching genius level and didn't stick Harry's thoughts into conversations seemingly at random. As it is it's still okay it just could have been much better.
Author\'s Response: I stick Harry's thoughts into the conversation because this story is from Harry's perspective. What he says is not always what he wants to say, so I write that as well. Thanks for the review.