I really like this. I love the relationship between the characters and personally what tickles my pickle is the apparent interest "I" shares with me on muscly, toned gentlemen with happy trails... I'm also a fan of war-wounds, which includes that huge ass bruise.
Anyway, back on topic. The smut was well written I thought, so good on you for that :D The only criticism I could say is that you could space out the text more. It's quite difficult to read as it is on a computer screen so dividing it into paragraphs would be a huge help. I know, I know "But that's how it is in books!", but pages on books tend to have a lot less text...
But yes, I did enjoy this. Keep it up.
Author's response
LOL me too! And thank you. I'm pretty self-conscious about the smut I write. I always re-read it a couple of times to make sure that I feel it brings that intense moment to life in every possible way. And I know. But I couldn't get it to space out like that. I'll try on the next one. And some books are actually double spaced. So whoever defends themselves for their spacing on that quote is mistaken to what book text looks like LOL
But this is just a piece of what I have for this new story I've been developing. I have much more than this little chunk, but I don't know if I want to put it up or not. I don't think it's quite yet developed as much as I'd like it to be. But thank you for the support! I might just put up another chunk just for you :)
-Andrea