I just found this story today (31 May 14) and have enjoyed it quite a bit.
It's an interesting take on 'inter-house bonding'.
I like the way the characters have developed as the story has progressed.
It read quite smoothly but perhaps (says the guy who's never published anything but an honor's thesis for college graduation requirements) a bit of kibitzing with another author or an experienced editor may bring it that much nearer to ready to publish a wider venue.
Much thanks for sharing your hard work and love of HP fanfiction.
Best regards,
SteveC.
Author's response
Thank you for commenting!
If you want to message me to chat about the story or writing in general I'd be happy to do that.