This story has parts form Nevalyn24's "A World of What If". It's almost pretty much copied. Just because you add in your ideas, that doesn't make it your story. You can't just take other peoples works. 1) it's illegal and 2) it's just a shitty thing to do.
Author's response
I added the disclaimer that i own nothing but ideas i added if you cant read that which means guess what ...i own noth ing but ideas i added then dont read it! I dont claim to own the story just my ideas and just like everyone else writing about veronica mars.