Review for inheirtance

inheirtance

(#) Staryfury0901 2019-01-01

Your math's a bit off. I left off the zeros and just added the Billion and Millions and got over 16 Billion galleons. Another thing, when you get the time I suggest going back into this and editing it better. Please don't take any of this as flaming your work as I'm truly not trying to. I am trying to be helpful. I'm also enjoying this. Trust me when I say you could do a lot worse while writing this! If you think I'm kidding try reading the first chapter of Harry Potter and the Super Robot War on ff.net. Good luck! I hope you can unscramble sentences and everything that goes along with writing a story on the fly! You'll need it! The later chapter improve greatly.