Damn you, there goes the second rating point...
I so LOVED the parallel thing between Patrick mopping away the blood and Bree seeing her razor. Stunning. I am stunned.
I'm probably in no position to pass on judgments like that (but that doesn't really keep me from doing so): I believe your writing's really improved.
I am very impressed. :)
Author's response
thanks i am grinning like an idiot now haha :))))