All right, so, I was cleaning my room and found this story and started to read the first few lines, just from curiousity. And now, ten minutes later, I'm sitting on the floor in front of my computer because my chair is way the hell over there, and your story utterly captivated me to a point where I really didn't care.
And that was a really long sentence. Sorry.
What I'm trying to say is that I was so drawn in by your characterization and wordplay that I didn't even realize how uncomfortable I was in my position. You captured everything perfectly and vividly. Excellent, excellent job.
...and sorry about my lame review. I'm not so great at them.