Oooooh good start. I know I give the crappiest reviews on earth but I'll try my best this time:
I love the way you make Pete seem like a total dickhead. No, seriously. Some people make him too... nice in their stories, a bit like the way Patrick should be. Now I don't know if that's what he's like in real life, based on the fact that I've never met him, but this is fanfiction.
Author's response
i know; you look at patrick and think "cute, chubby, little gentle giant, reserved type" and then you look at Pete and think "hott ass whole" lmao