Hey there jengrey!
Awsome opener! I really can't wait for the next chapter! This is definitely a favourite! I loved teh description and just the whole general idea! There were a few spelling/gramers errors but that's okay, just be sure to keep an eye out for them;) i like the way you set it up too. It's really easy to read. Keep up the awsome job! Update soon.
~Tory;D