I'm intrigued. Really. I know that's not much of a helpful review but it's the best I can come up with atm =]
Please update soon.
Author's response
thanks, i apreciate that you even took the time to read it. im not that great of a writer, but i had a horrible dream and i dicided to get if off my chest here. so far, its working :) thanks again and check out the new chapter