Harry receives a visit.
- First I am sorry for your loss that is hard. I lkie ware I think you are going. But I want some more clues about this thing that is yelling at DD and spying on Ron that is one thing you should ad to your next update. Also H/Hr is always cool by me thanks and keep writting.
(#) DragonBard 2008-07-21 07:53:33 PMYou don't know how the relationship started? They're teenagers. Feelings can crop up on you quite quickly at that time, remember? Sometimes there'll be someone you barely notice, something about them catches you and BANG you're attracted to them.
Remember, the book covers an entire year, so there was plenty of time for him to start being attracted to her.
My sympathies for your loss.
- Harry didn't check his visitors to see if they were imposters, but they didn't check him either... which is odd for Moody, especially considering he noticed his behaviour is very different.
too bad you say it's probably going to be Harry/Hermione... not a pairing I like personally. it has even less basis as the Harry/Ginny thing.
who and what is the person who is hanging around? I take it he's related to Harry somehow? will the Gringotts visit have something to do with it?
hope you'll continue soon!
(#) stealacandy 2008-07-22 04:42:57 AMFirst, my condolences for your loss.
Second, you said it's your first ever fanfic, and you were looking for advice.
Here's some: Don't let the tagging system (the one that marked your story as boring) get to you.
I've seen a story that was nothing more thatn an author taking one cliche formula after another and putting them together withought even bothering to fill in the blanks, that was full with bad grammer, bad vocabulary and bad language, and yet chapter after chapter got tagged as "Original".
I really don't know how they do it...
- Now as far as the story, Hermione is the most loyal to Harry and wouldn't betray him and over the years it is more obvious that she never will. and showing that ron doesn't care about anything unless it's happening to him shows what kind of person that he is. but overall I like it and your keeping some suspence in it by not revealing who is watching.