When circumstances force Harry to adopt his cousin Dudley's daughter, he calls on Hermione for help. Will their friendship bloom into something more?
(#) NacNud 2008-09-21 10:11:37 PM
I think you have a very good start. I can't wait to see what you do with it. Keep up the good work.
(#) StenStyren 2008-09-22 07:42:05 AM
This was a very good start and i will be following this story for a few more chapters atleast.
Your language is good and you manage to keep the reader interested.
Keep up the good job!
(#) Minion 2008-09-22 02:58:29 PM
Good so far I hope that you continue.
(#) MoonFang 2008-09-22 06:00:19 PM
It was good so far. hope you keep it up cause i'd like to see what happens
(#) jay21317 2008-09-22 09:02:37 PM
im with stenstyren its good could be longer though hmm not my favorite pairing but ill try and read it XD
Good start, keep it going I am looking forward to reading more.
(#) rb8 2008-09-25 07:35:05 AM
I like the story, but I have a plot question. How is it that Dudley had a child the same age as Ted? She would have to have been born during Book 7. Not impossible, but an explanation is probably required for the premise to be believable. Usually these kinds of stories are set a little farther in the future.
Carla is actually about a year younger than Ted.
An explanation will be given next chapter.
(#) tayryn 2008-09-28 09:03:59 AM
Interesting start but I found that Molly not asking about Clara a little strange and OOC for her.
Other than that, I'm looking forward to reading more.
(#) LabRat 2008-10-25 03:40:10 PM
I think that custody can be switched that easily, unless it's contested by someone else. They did the same thing in the movie Matilda, and I've heard that it's really easy if all parties involved are in agreement.