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• The Big Box of Silliness

  (#) stick97 2009-02-24

  Please please please please please please^i
  continue this story!
  You hit the nail on the head with the whole OOC Hermione, and handled it beautifully. Harry's loyalty, and the draco comment are spot on.
  
  This could be a great one. And thankfully, not a canon one.

• The Big Box of Silliness

  (#) DrT 2009-02-24

  Interesting, and unresolved, place to leave the reader!

• The Big Box of Silliness

  (#) xhale 2009-02-24

  Lemme get this right - this is a story about how you are (and through you, Harry is) incensed at Hr for messing with the minds of her parents, and somewhere on page two you already have Harry putting someone under a compulsion. I know it's shades of gray, but that's a glaring mistake. Couldn't he instead have placed a glamour on the appointment book to have him "double-booked" by accident? Or a post-it in Mrs. Granger's hand saying "Don't forget Mr. Potter's emergency appointment? Or put the "partner" discussion in a flashback and have the secretary recognize him. As Harry well knows there's lots of ways of manipulating a situation without resorting to cranial invasion.
  
  Bonus points for the Dark City-esque way to make Hr sleep though.
  
  I know this is your idea pile, but this one feels less refined and more full of holes then all the other "chapters" combined - perhaps that's because canon went to shitsville after book 4.
  
  Harry memory charms her because charming her parents was tearing her up? She thinks it's okay to charm her parents but not her because "I'm a witch?" Why does Harry tell the Grangers that all the Weasleys survived?
  
  You know what? I know how to fix this - every problem gone. In chapter two, Chiun is brought in as a relationship counselor. And I demand that Sue Bones calls her husband Bandit because he's one-armed. And Ron tells her he's a "slot machine" because he's a pervert. ;-P

• The Big Box of Silliness

  (#) Terdwilicker 2009-02-24

  I think you should end it with: "And she never saw Harry again." This story concept works best as a stand alone. Trying to win him back would be pedestrian and cliche. Ending it here, that suits the scene.

• The Big Box of Silliness

  (#) whatareyouevensaying 2009-02-24

  Such an effing great idea...pity you turned Harry into an utter whiner at the end. Yes, it's justifiable for him to run off like that, but he wouldn't. Even Kinsfire at his worst wouldn't have Harry run out on Hermione like that. Not that I really have anything against Kinsfire, but he does have the nasty habit of having Harry run away from situations like that.
  
  At any rate...please continue this.

• The Big Box of Silliness

  (#) Wolfric 2009-02-25

  I like this chapter. I think it could spawn a second installment if you are so moved but it stands alone as well. Hermione did seem rather arrogant in her treatment of her parrents. Thanks for writing. W.

• The Big Box of Silliness

  (#) foolishwandwaver 2009-03-05

  One of the best one-shots you've written...yet.
  I believe that it is entirely possible for Harry to just walk away like he did in your story. After going through all he did, most by other's manipulations and expectations, he indeed would reach a point where it comes down to "this fat and no further". A Great story. Wish there were more like this.

• The Big Box of Silliness

  (#) MonCappy 2009-09-20

  I disagree with Whatareyouevensaying regarding this story. In any case, I would definitely like to see a follow up to this story.

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