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• The Wizard on the Edge of Forever

  (#) grookill 2009-04-22

  Good chapter.
  
  Folks may say that it was cliched but it pretty much matches up with the experience I've seen others go through.
  
  The fact that the Bat'leth is blooded is going to have some significance. I've been reading Seel'vor's stuff recently so my mind is a bit twisted, so therefore I wonder if that because it was Kim's blood on the blade that means (by Klingon custom) that Harry and Kim are married...
  
  Good luck with the first chapter of Starfleet Academy! Hopefully he'll make some new friends there and face the new challenges with them.
  

  Author's response

  Yeah I know about that off to the military experience. I did 20 years in the Army. While I didn't go through that exact same thing that Harry did, A pair of girls that I did know in High School did decide on their own to take me out to dinner the night before I went.
  
  As for the Blooded Blade, I'm still not sure what I am going to do with that. Yes it is siginifigant to the klingons, but I own a sword that the metal itself is discolored by blood being on the blade and I know where and when it happened. (Gallipoli,1915) So at this time, I'm not quite sure what to do with that little bit.
  
  Rob

• The Wizard on the Edge of Forever

  (#) rharvier 2009-04-22

  I really enjoyed this chapter. The story flows really well and I have to admit you have a vivid imagination. Keep it up! I'm looking forward to your next chapter.

  Author's response

  I'm glad that you like it. Currently the next chapter is at beta right now and its follow on has been started. Keep on reading and reviewing.

• The Wizard on the Edge of Forever

  (#) Cateagle 2009-04-22

  Heh, quite a poignant and enjoyable chapter. It should be interesting to see how the experiences, on all sides, of that break-up influence future developments. Meanwhile, I'm rather looking forward to seeing how he does at Starfleet Academy, who he'll meet, and what challenges, other than the curriculum, he'll face.
  
  I thought the bit with Steve and his friends was amusing, some people just don't learn to leave others alone. Somehow, I suspect those who gifted Harry with that weapon would be most amused if they knew of the event.

  Author's response

  Oh yeah, the Kingons would be laughing their asses off at the incident. then they would be telling Harry how to do it better in case it happened again.
  
  As for the Breakup, while I have a few ideas on if it influences further events and what they might be, they are still tentative and may not be included in the fic at all. The ideas I have don't necessarily advance the fic, they do add an interesting undertone, should I use them.
  
  Rob

• The Wizard on the Edge of Forever

  (#) Cocoa_girl 2009-04-22

  I hope that Harry runs into the Klingons again soon. I like that Harry seems to just fit in with them. Also will Harry somehow find a way to train in magic so that when he does go back to his own time, because I know he will he can finally take down Voldemort. Was the person who set off and killed so many people that day did they do it to kill Voldemort and his people because they were getting out of hand and if he wasn't killed Voldemort would have seceded in taking over earth? And all the other people killed, where just collateral damage? When Harry goes back he can prevent that from happening.

  Author's response

  Oh Harry will run into the Klingons again, but it's going to be a while. Harry's going to deal with 'ol moldy, I'm just not gonna say exactly how just yet, mainly because I haven't worked out all the details. As for the Missing wizarding world, an explanation is coming soon, I promise.
  
  Rob

• The Wizard on the Edge of Forever

  (#) DrT 2009-04-23

  Rather a transitional sort of chapter. . . .

  Author's response

  Exactly, this chapter is a bridge between the teen Harry and the adult Harry. It is a necessity for this story to flow properly, and hopefully things are going to pick up again with the following chapter.

• The Wizard on the Edge of Forever

  (#) red_jacobson 2009-04-23

  I agree with DrT, it was a transitional chapter, but still worked quite well. I'm wondering if there is going to be a Harry James Potter Jr waiting for Harry when he gets out of the Academy?
  
  red

  Author's response

  Yes I fully admit that this is a transitional chapter. As for a Harry James Potter Jr, well the Mrs. has been giving me the evil eye about that, so at this point I can't say one way or another. However, IF I do decide to do something along those lines, there is exactly one way for me to pull this off without getting eviscerated with a spoon by the Mrs. and a few others.
  
  Rob

• The Wizard on the Edge of Forever

  (#) juggler196 2009-04-23

  I like it. I would have enjoyed a bit more detail in regards to the 'fight scene', but then again i've always been a fan of any brawl scene where harry truly kicks/scares the snot of any of his contemporaries (usually draco and co.). It's obvious that you've got a story that's going to span many years, and like that your style allows you to move throug the time-frame at a good pace while putting enough details in to keep your readers interested and informed.

  Author's response

  Well, I did partially write one up, however I couldn't seem to get across the level of lethality that Harry was holding back from, not to mention It just didn't seem to fit into the chapter at all. so I junked it. Perhaps one day I'll redo some of the chapters and expand and polish what I have up now. However I have a ton of ideas for the plot that some people have managed to figure out and other pretty major pieces only one other person knows and she's not telling.
  
  Rob

• The Wizard on the Edge of Forever

  (#) Elfwyn 2009-04-23

  Oh, I wish you had put in the scene with the boys, but my imagination is pretty good. The break up of Harry and Kim was nicely done and something most high school sweethearts that go to different colleges have to do...as you said growing up is hard to do...and most don't! lol

  Author's response

  I do kinda wish that I had been able to do the scene as well. Unfortunately, What I had written out just didn't fit with the chapter in any way. Also what had done really couldn't convey how much Harry was holding back and how badly outmatched the boys were.
  
  Perhaps one day I will rewrite chunks of this fic to expand upon and flesh out ideas that are only barely touched upon.
  
  Rob

• The Wizard on the Edge of Forever

  (#) keichan2 2009-04-23

  I don't know much about Klingons, so I wonder if the discoloration on the blade have a known meaning, or if it just something you came up with. What I'm certain, though, is that there is a meaning!
  
  Ow... I would have LOVED to see what Harry did to the four idiots... :-D
  
  I have to say I had totally forgotten about "Ron" (great name, by the way :-D)
  
  Say, I wonder... did they think about protections? Because with Harry's luck, he'll soon be father... Though the way I feel you are writing this story, he will spend a long time in space, and it wouldn't be fair to Kim...
  
  Please, update soon!
  

  Author's response

  Part of me wants to do something with the discoloration and another part is going leave it be. I've got a sword on the wall here that does have a discolored blade from spilling blood (great grandpaw was a freighter captain at Gallipoli and killed a couple of boarders that were trying to hijack the ship and take the cargo. Great guy, but utterly ruthless when it came to pirates)Anyway, that sword is where I got the idea from, but I'm still not sure how to go with it, if I go anywhere at all.
  
  I did attempt to write out what happened between Harry and the Idiots, but it didnt really fit in with the chapter and I didnt feel that it properly showed ho outclassed they were and how much Harry was holding back.
  
  Daddy Harry. Well Right now, I cant say if I'm going to go there or not. The Mrs. gave me the Evil Eye last time I mentioned it, and i have no desire to be eviscerated with a spork. Though IF I do decide to go there, there is only one way I could do it without getting beaten too badly.
  
  Rob

• The Wizard on the Edge of Forever

  (#) GryffindorDragon 2009-04-23

  This is quite an interesting story. I find the crossover with Startrek a bit strange. But you've married to imaginary worlds that I love, so kudos for that. I'm sorry to see Kim leave, but maybe that's necessary so Harry can get back to his world -- or does he? To fulfill the prophecy, it would seem an absolute essential. And the Dursley story about Harry and Dud's daughter, Annie, seems to indicate it too. The wizard's seem to have fled earth to the stars, and it seems the Klingons may know something about that, too.
  Well, write some more of the story so I can figure out what's really going on! :)

  Author's response

  I'm glad that you like the story so far. Kim's leaving was not necessary to Harry's going back to the twentieth per se, but I used her presence to give Harry a "normal" high school experience. Her Breaking up with him, While I didn't experience it personally, heard of it happening more times than I care to count. I did 20 years in the US Army and that exact scenario seemed to happen to new privates and brand new 2nd Lieutenants.
  
  Wizards going to the stars and the klingons knowing about it. Well some Weasleys did. But the Klingons being aware of wizards and witches not really. I promise that the whole thing is going to come out very soon.

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